My very own short story!

I have just completed my first short story in quite sometime. It has a message, and I hope it comes across clearly. The few people who've read it so far have given it rave reviews! I am proud of it, even if no one else likes it (but i hope you do). Here goes nothin!

Deep and dark, here I am stuck in this room. A cubicle of a space specially made for and by me, now occupied by ten others. The radio bzzt-bzzt’s in and out, no contact with the outside world.
I have my house plasticizsed and duct-taped, my water bottled and my gas-masks masked. I live in America, I live in fear, and the terrorists have won. I do not live on the west coast, I do not live on the east coast. I do not live in New York, I do not live in Los Angeles; I do not live in a big city. I live in fear, I live in America, I live in a basement bunker with 10 other people, and the terrorists have won.
The alert was orange, I think it’s red now, I’m not too sure what the colors are; all I see is black. “High” was all I saw before I rushed out to the local Home Depot. I beat everyone there. Some say I’m crazy for doing such, some say I’m a coward, some say I over-reacted. I would say I was being prepared, cautious, and safe. I am the ant and they are the grasshopper.
My neighbors are grasshoppers too; annoying, mooching grasshoppers. I always knew they were. I should never have told them about my secret during the last block party; big mistake on me.
I have enough oxygen for me to breathe for a years time. I have two gas masks, for me and my hopeful love who never came in time. I have enough bottled water to last a life time (but life time in this case is extremely relative and flexible as it could end any time soon). I do not have a gun for my neighbors’ heads. I knew I had forgotten something.
Bzzt-bzzt goes the radio. Fragments of words static in and out. “Thi.....n.......ne....overnme....bzzzzzzzt...” The batteries are almost gone, and I’ve no power. The electric bill still lies on the table, upstairs and in the kitchen. My canned food: baked beans, raviolis, meat stew, spaghetti and such. Good eating but the eating’s gone. The neighbors, nameless and faceless locusts have devoured the rations; their children were especially keen on the cold and watery apple sauce.
Trapped below my bathroom, we’ve sat in wait for nearly three months. I hadn’t thought this out much when the obsession began two weeks prior. I quit my job at the airline and took all my life savings and invested in shovels, buckets, jackhammers and the like. Some people say I’m crazy, the government claims there’s nothing for me to worry about, I say there is and I say I’m just being prepared. There is nothing left of the savings, and there is nothing left of the food. We must revert to cannibalism.
“I pick the child!” “The hell you do! You’ll Pick mine!” “You’re right! I will! And I call the legs!” “You sick bastard! That’s my son!” “Yeah well you’re sons a fat, greedy, little shit!” “Don’t you get into this!” “It’s true! He sucked up all the food!” “The key to survival is to take out the fattest one!” “You’re supposed to take out the one who eats the most...” “He’s a growing boy!” “He’s my goddamn supper!!” And so the conversation continues.
The flashlight clicks on; risky move, the batteries are all gone. Flashlight is a loose term, it’s more of a spotlight. With the cubicle of a room lighted up, I give chase. I never knew the fat little prick could move so fast. Squeaking in fear and ducking under legs and chairs, he escapes me. Running is quite a surprise to me, as I thought he might roll alittle better.
BAM! goes the shovel and the fat little fuck is out. Click! goes the spotlight and the room is dark. I am joined by eight others in our full course meal of pig skin, pig’s feet, liver and onions. Haggis was desert. You could taste the Chef Boyardee and T.V. dinners like a new flavor of ice cream. Though not appetizing at all, it filled us full. They say I’m sick, they say I’m going to Hell, and they say I’m going to die. I say I’m hungry, I say I’m full, and I say I’m surviving.
Bzzt-bzzt goes the radio. Time glowing red is the only light we see, static the only sound. Voices bzzt in and out. Move the antenna someone suggests. The natural-antenna-mover person I am, I find the best connection. “For those....ust tuning in, this is the EBS: Emer...cy Broadcast Sys.... The panic-stricken citizens of America, who have hidden themselves in their hom.....unkers,” “I think that’s us guys,” “are advised by this Government Issued statement claiming, ‘There is, and never was, no cause for alarm. All warnings of inevitable disaster have been false alarms and, in some cas.....est the EBS. I repeat, all warnings of inevitable disaster have false alarms and, in some cases, drills in order to test the.....pologize for any inconvenience these tests may have caused you. Thank you, and God bless.”
Oh. Shit.
 

roberto999

The Black Chick of Darkness
ranemaka13 said:
reply you sons of bitches.
REPLY!
Since you asked for my reply specifically... ;D
First you had a very good idea and I'd like that others also would post, like you their short fiction ( at least it would be a welcome change from the usual "I heard from the nephew of sister of the-brother in law of the uncle of the porter of Miura's home that Skully is...or "Is it stronger the Hulk or Wyald ?" type of post ;D)
It is a very interesting fiction: In a way it did remember me of the famous Orson Welles radio show about the martian invasion. I like the way you suggest that the fear is the true enemy more that the danger itself.
Like I said I hope to read soon something else from you, and others also.
 
roberto999 said:
I like the way you suggest that the fear is the true enemy more that the danger itself.

Bravo roberto! that is indeed the point, as well as the incredible ability Americans have in running with it to no end. Hear about that guy that in Conneticut that practically shrink wrapped his entire house because of the warning?
and this was written in a moment of inspiration, so i had no previous planning for it, so i cant say when or if ill be able to write another like it. of course, when i do, it will be here first.
 
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